Comments on: Aldain, Ch. 8 http://www.andrewblatt.com/archives/17 Home to the Tale of Aldain and the Solomon Saga by Andrew Blatt Wed, 24 Feb 2010 17:22:16 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.4 By: Andrew http://www.andrewblatt.com/archives/17/comment-page-1#comment-16 Andrew Thu, 18 Oct 2007 04:32:18 +0000 http://web.ics.purdue.edu/~ablatt/?p=17#comment-16 Ahh. Excellent points there Kyle. Each one will be addressed and redressed. The Mistress's predisposition for inflicting pain has been hinted at by Aldain's scars. However, the connection will be solidified later. Ahh. Excellent points there Kyle. Each one will be addressed and redressed. The Mistress’s predisposition for inflicting pain has been hinted at by Aldain’s scars. However, the connection will be solidified later.

]]> By: Kyle http://www.andrewblatt.com/archives/17/comment-page-1#comment-15 Kyle Thu, 18 Oct 2007 04:28:35 +0000 http://web.ics.purdue.edu/~ablatt/?p=17#comment-15 "[higher]-dimensional M-space" "Each craft is washed in green light as my spell impacts it." (Short and sweet. 'wash' gives it a distinct visuality.) Becoming the dragon: I was confused for a moment. I think it was that 'I' is both hanging motionless w/in the dragon and is the dragon itself. If you reread the section, I've faith in your ability to make it clear. "I use the element of surprise to fire off a beam of magical energy, shaving off the wing of the attacking craft. He spins off..." off, off, off "The leader veers off and the crystal blade shatters as the wingman detonates." Huh? Where is the blade when it shatters, and is it the wingman or his A-boat that detonates/explodes? Feels like a good chapter break. Should I, joe reader, know more about this connection between Mistress and pain or is that going to be slowly revealed? That's all folks... for now. “[higher]-dimensional M-space”

“Each craft is washed in green light as my
spell impacts it.” (Short and sweet. ‘wash’
gives it a distinct visuality.)

Becoming the dragon: I was confused for a moment. I think it was that ‘I’ is both hanging
motionless w/in the dragon and is the dragon itself. If you reread the section, I’ve faith in your ability to make it clear.

“I use the element of surprise to fire off a beam of magical energy, shaving off the wing of the attacking craft. He spins off…” off, off, off
“The leader veers off and the crystal blade
shatters as the wingman detonates.” Huh? Where
is the blade when it shatters, and is it the
wingman or his A-boat that detonates/explodes?

Feels like a good chapter break. Should I, joe reader,
know more about this connection between Mistress
and pain or is that going to be slowly revealed?

That’s all folks… for now.

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